Bad, choppy animation. Terrible art design. Awful pacing.
The sound design is ATROCIOUS. You're not being artistic by altering the speed of a well-known song this much. You're just being irritating. Especially when you're making harsh cuts between scenes.
If you had a story in mind, it's unintelligible. Again, this isn't artistic. It's just irritating. Your job as a writer and animator is to deliver information to your audience. You can shroud it, but it should be at least hinted at.
You're relying too much on shock value. Much like GG Allin. But he had a method to his madness. He was delivering a message. You are not.
i am deleviring a message
the message of g g allin
That and the fact that illusion and reality are interchangeable, a hot chick is really just a rotting pile of bones, and if you wander into a mausoleum with some lube and blow you'll have one hell of a night!
The bass drum sounded like a crappy tom. The controls were muddy and akward. The response was poor and unstable. You need to make it sort of sound like a real drum set. It only makes sense if the progression of sounds in the drums go lower in pitch as it goes to the right.
OMFG, it's a video! 0/5!
Claymation is hard, but at least you put some effort into it. The camera angles were really good, as were the character designs. you obviously worked a long time on this. Some people on this site, namely knox, don't put very much effort into their claymations. Congrats on raising the bar.
after watching this, my first thought was "what the hell was this about?"
remember, you're telling a story. you have to make it clear what it is. for the sake of argument, i'll say that this flash could've been interpreted in the following ways:
1) the guy is rapping about a dead fred durst.
2) the guy is rapping about shooting people and putting hats on their graves.
3) the guy dies.
4) rap and violence are equal and both should be rubbed out of society like i rub a beastly load out of my cock.
5) you want to kill rappers.
6) society as a whole wants to kill rappers
see what i mean?
otherwise, keep up your "serious" attitude. it'll get you somewhere.
I liked it.
Good job, man. At first i thought that you wouldn't be able to keep the artwork level up, but you did a good job of balancing it throughout. There were a few slow spots, but other than that, it was pretty seamless.
not bad... for a sprite movie
You actually did pretty well in manipulating the sprites and whatnot. Even the custom-made additions were decent. However, the Doom trooper scene was lackluster and detracted from the value of your work as a whole. Additionally, your script was cringe-worthy at best. In the same vein, the subtitles were annoyingly hard to follow since the text colors for characters changed randomly.
Overall, you've got talent, kid. You're just not utilizing them in an original way.
Nothing really happened. Most of the tweens were decent, but it should have been half as long. As a dramatic piece, it fails because of the generic premise. The fact that there are four seasons does not make you think. The lack of camera movement also works against you. Make use of close-ups. A close shot of the leaves changing or the family entering or leaving the house would've been nice. It would've been a welcome change of scenery, even. ha! but your art style was decent and it was a good attempt.
This was a good attempt at whoring an already-popular character to save your flash. Not only did you include Strawberry-clock, but you included a very strange stick-like Spiderman whose feet have the ability to stay stuck to the floor no matter what his body is doing. The title of this flash should have been "Strawberry Berry Straw Clock Clock Strawberry." There was no background... unless you count the 'B'... Strawberry talked too much. His shtick is one-liners. making a diatribe from one-liners is annoying and strange. Plus, the animation of his...uhhh... face... was slow and disconcerting, while the animation of his... mouth arrow... thing... lacked effort. Having the 'B' stay on screen for so long both makes no sense and is distracting from the actual content of the flash. It would also probably be safe to dissolve the webbing after a few seconds. Mostly, though, the exclamation point shouldn't stay after Spiderman is already hit by the car. Overall, decent attempt, but i'm suprised it hasn't been blammed.
you have to be kidding.
i'm just praying that this is satire. to seriously write and record that song is ludicrous. i can't even think about it for long before my brain tries to kick my eyes out of my head and escape through the sockets.
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